Thursday, 8 October 2015

Birth!



A tunnel
Long and windy
Darkness engraved
Pressing silence
Whispers
A furtive nexus, or
An ominous swear

 Caged in,
my kicks, Feeble
my shrieks, Futile
wonder
if can permeate
those dense walls

 Tender tapping
The sweet croon
A mellifluous voice
Vectors of assurance
Threats lifted

 A sudden flush
All illuminated, white

 One holds,
The emollient touch
One kisses,
Welcome note shared
One calls,
"You are mine"

 I recognize
that Voice and that One
The cool gentle wind murmurs - 
"Mom"
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17 comments:

  1. Kerry O'Connor8 October 2015 at 20:48

    Interesting development of the central idea through the use of the given words. I like the final stanza.

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  2. Anonymous8 October 2015 at 23:27

    being born is beautiful .... miss pie https://pieceofpie.wordpress.com/2015/10/08/probably-so/

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    1. Susmit21 October 2015 at 15:05

      Indeed it is...Thanks for stopping by, Pieceofpie!

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  3. Sherry Blue Sky9 October 2015 at 20:29

    Oh this is so lovely. I, too, especially love the closing stanza.

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    1. Susmit21 October 2015 at 15:07

      Thanks for inspiring, Sherry! I'm learning.

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  4. Sanaa Rizvi9 October 2015 at 23:08

    Captivating write :)

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    1. Susmit21 October 2015 at 15:09

      You had never been miser with words, Sanaa! Thanks for stopping by.

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  5. Indrani10 October 2015 at 06:18

    Well expressed, nice lines.

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  6. Outlawyer12 October 2015 at 18:56

    Ah, sweet! The commingled voices lovely. k.

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    1. Susmit21 October 2015 at 15:20

      A pleasure to have those comments, Outlawyer! Thanks.

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  7. Maniparna17 November 2015 at 02:59

    The c last stanza is so beautiful and tender...loved it... :-)

    You have become very irregular..isn't it? This post is almost a month old... :-)

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    1. Susmit22 November 2015 at 12:12

      Thanks Maniparna! You really got it right, very irregular these days....some sort of lag, though I keep scribbling but nothing concrete, so to say. I'll surely have to rise from this slumber. Thanks for visiting!

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  8. जमशेद आज़मी17 November 2015 at 20:19

    Very interesting post here. Thanks for sharing.

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  9. जमशेद आज़मी17 November 2015 at 20:28

    Very interesting post here. Thanks for sharing.

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